veejaycee
Registered: February 2009
Posts: 5,689
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Thu August 19, 2010 1:05pm
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HI Ray,
First let me say how pleased I am you decided to join us - it shows the value of staying in touch. You'll recognise a lot of old friends from S/C here, if not by user name then by style of picture or comment.
I like this a lot - especially that it's in B&W and in silhouette - both of which make it more compelling to my eyes - great sky too.
I do have a couple of suggestions - more for an alternative picture than as a critique because with one small reservation it is great as is. The reservation is sharpening halos - I suspect this is sharpened for print but on the web it shows slight halos.
My alternative view breaks the "rules of composition" to some extent but as we know, those rules are really guidelines.
That suggestion is to crop closely to the rear wheel of the cycle (left) and just as closely below it so that the angle of the hill disappears at the corner of the frame with another crop immediately right of the leg of the wooden structure. It breaks the rules by placing the activity at either extreme of the frame leaving an empty space in between whereas the original is carefully and properly composed but I think the alternative works too. Maybe the empty area is the "negative space" I read about from arty types. 
BTW, I was going to introduce you to the members but as you've chosen not to reveal your ID in your profile I'll respect your wish for anonymity. It must be hell having those hordes of adoring females driving past to see where you live.
Vic.
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janper44
Registered: December 2009
Posts: 7,084
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Thu August 19, 2010 2:25pm
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I like the perspective that you adopted for your composition setting the silhouetted figures of the individuals against the cloudy background sky.
I find a sense of flow leads me from the individual on the bicycle at the left up the slight slope to the larger grouping on the right... an interesting dynamic feel which plays off well against that beautiful looking sky (a b&w format worked well here to make the sky a central feature of the picture for me).
I find the black background color of this posting page works against your presentation. A need for a thin black border and a slightly white border just to create separation between your picture and the color of this page.
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Shimshams
Registered: April 2009
Posts: 948
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Thu August 19, 2010 5:36pm
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Hi, Nice shot, I like the monochrome treatment, and the Point of view. For what its worth I might have possibly slightly cropped the top of the sky widening the shot a little or darkened the top a little more. But even without that its a good shot well seen and captured. Thanks
Rob
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Mick
Registered: January 2009
Posts: 1,608
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Thu August 19, 2010 10:39pm
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Good to see you here Ray .. wow we go back a few years to Shutter city days. a very nice capture to start off your PC career .Great B/W shot with good tones .. I agree with the crop that Vic suggested. Look forward to more of the same.
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